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Your friend had made a plan for you to see a movie together but you cannot now not join him. You've found another friend who can go instead of you. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: Explain why you cannot go anymore Say who can go instead of you Say why this person is a good person to go with

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Dear Hassan, How are you? I'm getting in touch because, I wanted to let you know that I can't make it to the research movie as we had planned
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 since my wife's health is unstable.
Instead
, I suggest you join with one of my college mates, who is as much interested in the research movie as me. As you know, my wife Maryam is pregnant and she is in her first trimester. lately,
this
 morning Maryam is feeling nausea and vomiting, which resulted in dehydration and weakness. So, I should be taking care of her every time. So,
instead
 of me, you can go with Robin, who lives in the same neighbourhood as me. He can make it up to you in no time. Robin is a good friend of mine, who graduated with me in 2016. He had done a lot of research studies in his life and striving for more.
Besides
, he's an interesting person, who can socialise with anyone he meets for the first time. Anyway, I'm sorry to can't catch up with you for the movie. Hope you can understand my situation. Best regards
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punctuation
Try to pay attention to minor errors, like punctuation after 'How are you?' which should be a question mark, not a period.
sentence structure
Consider using a variety of sentence structures to enhance your writing further.
closing statement
Make sure to include a clear closing statement to provide a more polished conclusion to your letter.
task response
You did a great job explaining why you could not attend the movie and offering a suitable alternative.
structure
Your letter was organized well, with each paragraph discussing a specific topic.
tone
You maintained a friendly and appropriate tone throughout the letter, which is crucial for a letter to a friend.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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