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Today, many people do not know their neighbors. Why is this? What can be done about this?

#people #neighbors
Individuality
 increases every day all over the world. ,
Also
individuality
 affects the relationship of
people
 who live together in the same building or same site complex. In my ,opinion If we survey neighbours’ relationships and the effect of
individuality
, we should have some results about neighbors' connections.
Firstly
, modern
life
 supports
individuality
 with the social network. The social network is important for
people
's connection
however
 it is created a new type of communication. For ,example
people
 do not need a person who is next door, because there are too many friends in their networks. ,
Also
 they find two different types of
people
 in social networks. Because of that
people
 can not make a connection with their neighbours.
However
, humanity must find a way the increase of face to face connections. Probably If we look at our history we will find a way, because our civilization had grown with
community
life
.
Although
 we are building a bigger
life
 complex nowadays. But we can not talk about
community
life
 there. For ,example I lived with almost two thousand
people
 in our site complex for two years. But I met my neighbours in our
community
 garden at a new year party. I am very grateful to our site complex’s manager to organized the party. In conclusion, the
people
 who live together in the same building or complex should find a way about
community
 activities.
For example
 New Year's parties, religious festivals and many good things for celebration. We need to make more
community
 activities to develop our neighbourhood.
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