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Today, many people do not know their neighbors. Why is this? What can be done about this?

#people #neighbors
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Individuality
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 increases every day all over the world. ,
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individuality
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 affects the relationship of
people
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 who live together in the same building or same site complex. In my ,opinion If we survey neighbours’ relationships and the effect of
individuality
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, we should have some results about neighbors' connections.
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, modern
life
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 supports
individuality
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 with the social network. The social network is important for
people
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's connection
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 it is created a new type of communication. For ,example
people
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 do not need a person who is next door, because there are too many friends in their networks. ,
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 they find two different types of
people
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 in social networks. Because of that
people
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 can not make a connection with their neighbours.
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, humanity must find a way the increase of face to face connections. Probably If we look at our history we will find a way, because our civilization had grown with
community
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life
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.
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 we are building a bigger
life
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 complex nowadays. But we can not talk about
community
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life
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 there. For ,example I lived with almost two thousand
people
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 in our site complex for two years. But I met my neighbours in our
community
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 garden at a new year party. I am very grateful to our site complex’s manager to organized the party. In conclusion, the
people
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 who live together in the same building or complex should find a way about
community
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 activities.
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 New Year's parties, religious festivals and many good things for celebration. We need to make more
community
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 activities to develop our neighbourhood.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • community engagement
  • social isolation
  • neighborhood watch
  • local initiatives
  • virtual interaction
  • privacy concerns
  • resident mobility
  • technological advancements
  • social media influence
  • work-life balance
  • busy personal schedules
  • community events
  • local residents
  • social interaction
  • community ties
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