Some think schools should rewards students who have the best academic results, while others think it’s more important to reward students who achieve other types of success (such as sports, music, and good behavior). Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Some people believe that educational systems should give
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to the students who have more achievements in school.
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some part of people think that it would be good to give only academic success, other parts of people contemplate it is better to give other tips for
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,
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as art, music and competition. On the one hand, In my ,perspective I think
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should be given more
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or gifts despite any type of progress. It helps them stay motivated and a good performance in their studies.
In addition
, when they achieve accomplishment they will appear self-confident, and
this
may positively impact their learning abilities and psychological behaviour.
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, in the interim, Russian researchers have been carrying out the work of children's psychology, for six months, they analyzed that undergraduates' brains will fluctuate when their have in a good mood. On the second hand, it is
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crucial to give
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only for some types of activities. Because
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all of the children have not ability to do all the items for a good performance. Some parts of the offspring will be good at
such
as sports and music or other sort of activities.
However
, some students will be good at studying academic subjects. It all depends on undergraduates' ability.
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, if the heir is keen on music, it should be allowed. Parents should talk with their children and ask what they really want to do. By way of conclusion, In my opinion, teachers and parents should give
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outstanding
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gifts for every fame of the child and estimate their work. It will aid them to stay in a good mood and control their psychological behaviour.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Scholastic achievement
  • Intellectual effort
  • Merit-based
  • Academic excellence
  • Educational outcomes
  • Well-rounded development
  • Multiple intelligences
  • Fosters self-esteem
  • Extracurricular involvement
  • Personal growth
  • Holistic approach
  • Diverse talents
  • Societal implications
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