Some think schools should rewards students who have the best academic results, while others think it’s more important to reward students who achieve other types of success (such as sports, music, and good behavior). Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Some people believe that educational systems should give
windfall
to the students who have more achievements in school. Add an article
a windfall
Although
some part of people think that it would be good to give only academic success, other parts of people contemplate it is better to give other tips for accomplishment
, Change the noun form
accomplishments
such
as art, music and competition.
On the one hand, In my ,perspective I think Correct article usage
the scion
scion
should be given more Correct your spelling
Scion
jackpot
or gifts despite any type of progress. It helps them stay motivated and a good performance in their studies. Fix the agreement mistake
jackpots
In addition
, when they achieve accomplishment they will appear self-confident, and this
may positively impact their learning abilities and psychological behaviour. For example
, in the interim, Russian researchers have been carrying out the work of children's psychology, for six months, they analyzed that undergraduates' brains will fluctuate when their have in a good mood.
On the second hand, it is also
crucial to give payoff
only for some types of activities. BecauseCorrect article usage
a payoff
,
all of the children have not ability to do all the items for a good performance. Some parts of the offspring will be good at Remove the comma
apply
such
as sports and music or other sort of activities. However
, some students will be good at studying academic subjects. It all depends on undergraduates' ability. For instance
, if the heir is keen on music, it should be allowed. Parents should talk with their children and ask what they really want to do.
By way of conclusion, In my opinion, teachers and parents should give trophy
outstanding Fix the agreement mistake
trophies
or
gifts for every fame of the child and estimate their work. It will aid them to stay in a good mood and control their psychological behaviour.Correct word choice
apply
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