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Reduce global environment damage should be handle by government rather than people . To what intent do you agree or disagree .

#environment #damage #government #people #intent
Global warming has
it
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our earth growingly inhospitable.
Although
,
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 many believe it is solely the government's responsibility to reduce the
hard
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harm
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 caused by global warming, others believe it should be done by the
people
. In
this
 essay, I will discuss how both the
governement
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government
 and we should be together in
this
 endeavour. The
governement
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government
 has the power to enact policies
than
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 can reduce global warming.
Governements
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Governments
 should do more to create initiatives that promote
awarenss
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awareness
 in tackling global
environment
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 damage.
For example
, laws passed by those in power that prohibit excess fossil fuel burning can bring about a positive change.
Furthermore
, seminars, sessions or running media newsletters that promote a more environmentally conscious lifestyle will teach
people
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how to make a positive difference. Increasing funding for non-profit organizations, whose sole jobs are to protect the Earth, is another way the ruling party can enforce better
envoronment
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environment
environmental
 protections. With that being said, the public is equally responsible
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 preserving the environment. Without the support of the
people
, these government-backed policies will fail.
For instance
, if the
people
 were to choose to
ingore
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ignore
 laws passed to protect trees and continue to cut them with disregard, it will turn out to be useless. Not only that, we should be willing to hold each other culpable and try to correct others if they stray from the right path. In conclusion, protecting the environment should be backed by both the
people
 and the government. The authorities can only do so much if we don't hold
our selves
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 to our word to reduce the damage we have caused.
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