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People from poor and rural backgrounds find it difficulty to get university education. Some people think that the government should make it easier for them to enter universities. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Population from rural and poor areas have been struggling to find a
university
education
, mostly
due to
 economic and social development factors.
On the other hand
, a part of the population believes that the
government
 should facilitate or encourage them to start
university
. I fully endorse
this
 statement and will provide relevant ideas to support my decision.
To begin
 with, people living in rural areas have been struggling to make ends meet, especially in developing countries like India and Pakistan. Social and economic development, to go with meagre opportunities, have made life quite difficult for people to even focus on educating their children.
In other words
,
due to
 economic adversity, a child has to support his family by working, even if they take out time for
education
, there are not enough opportunities for them to pursue
further
 to enrol into a
university
. To illustrate
this
, a survey by United Nations recently stated that more than 70 per cent of children in Pakistan end up working as child labour as they are not provided with adequate opportunities in
education
. In my opinion, the
government
 should allocate a budget for providing subsidies to children from poor backgrounds,
in particular
, they should be given stipends on a monthly basis to encourage them to get a
university
education
.
Next,
Government
 should focus on educating parents about the benefits and rewards of studying at a
university
, specifically arranging seminars on the importance of
university
education
.
This
 means that socially a society should be trained and educated about the importance of bachelor's and master's programs.
Moreover
, laws should be provisioned and implemented to ensure the rights of every child should be protected
such
 as the right to higher
education
 for everyone. To sum it up, rural areas, especially in developing countries have been at the receiving end of facing economic and social disparities.
Government
 should provide a stipend and aware the parents of the importance of
education
 and a
university
.
Furthermore
, laws should be implemented to ensure the right to
education
.
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