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Euthanasia, which is legal in a few countries of the world, has the increasing number of supporters. Some people think it should be legalized worldwide. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 legalisation of
euthanasia
 became a matter of serious concern. I would like to agree with the opinion that
euthanasia
 should be legal and accessible for everyone. First of all, I believe that
euthanasia
 may help to reveal the suffering of seriously ill patients. Sometimes situations may be hopeless, but a person has to go through all the pain, even though he has no chance of recovery. If
euthanasia
 would be legal, doctors could have easily stopped the patient's pain, despite the fact he is going to die. Even more,
this
 is not only about the patient, but
also
 his family. It is very hard to watch how your relatives suffer when you can not do anything. That’s why it’s important to give
people
 an opportunity to stop suffering
Moreover
, in some countries, medicine is very expensive and relatives could not afford to pay for treatment in a hospital.
In other words
, when a patient is going to die anyway, but
euthanasia
 is prohibited, he has to lay in hospital for months or years, when his family pays for it.
For example
, in the United States medicine is very high-priced and, in some cases,
people
, even if they are ready for the death of their ill member, have to pay thousands of dollars.
Thus
,
euthanasia
 in many cases may help
people
 financially.
To conclude
, I strongly believe that
euthanasia
 should be legal in all modern countries
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 because it helps
people
 to get rid of necessary pain and expense.
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