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few people think that social media is harmful to both people and society ? what do think? do you agree or disagree? Disagree

#people #media #society
Nowadays online
medias
such
 as Facebook and Instagram are more popular. A few among the mass believe that social
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 are harmful to both
people
 and society. I think social
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 made
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 impact
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people
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 life. I agree with the abovementioned statement and my point of view is
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 in the following paragraph. To commence with the advantage of social media is that,
firstly
, it
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 many
information
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folks much faster. To be clearer, social
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 share may
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data
 about current affairs, job opportunities and important messages so on and so forth.
For example
, during covid
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 the government spread the news about
seriousness
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 of the virus through the online platform.
Moreover
, these apps are very user-friendly it help
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people
 to
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 good friends. The public can reduce
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mental pressure because
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 social
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 are providing different entertainment facilities
such
 as reel video and gaming
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 help to decrease
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depression and anxiety.
Furthermore
,
people
 get
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information about new launch products and
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trend
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 through
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advertisements.
On the other hand
, there are some downsides
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social
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, first and foremost one is that
,
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 some
people
 misuse these facilities. To explain it
further
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 fake accounts
in
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 and
spread
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may lead to panic the society.
Secondly
, the online platform
take
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 our
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.
For instance
, if
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 person
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a
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product
in
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 Amazon or
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when ever
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 they open the social
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 show the adverts related to that item.
To sum up
,
although
 there are some cons
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social
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,
i
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 think the pros
is
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 beneficial for
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people
 and society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Global connectivity
  • Information sharing
  • Cultural collaboration
  • Expressive platform
  • Showcase creativity
  • Educational tool
  • Learning opportunities
  • Economic benefits
  • Wider audience
  • Customer engagement
  • Cyberbullying
  • Misinformation
  • Digital literacy
  • Social activism
  • Social justice
  • Mental health awareness
  • Professional support
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