Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now one big traffic jam. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governement take to discourage people from using theirs cars?

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cars have been people's favourite way to move around, despite causing not few problems to the city traffic and global environment.
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, lots of vehicles in the streets cause traffic jams close
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the most popular places around the city.
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the neighbourhood where I live in Rome, is located
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biggest hospital in the entire country.
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, all the patients come there by car,
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congestions
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in the area.
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issue could be solved by improving public transportation,
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people won't rely on cars anymore.
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cars
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leads to tons and tons of carbon dioxide emission.
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provokes respiratory issues in residents.
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the data, human lungs are not designed to
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pollution
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the most fragile part of the population,
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and children,
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respiratory problems.  In conclusion, I believe that the increasing number of impediments cannot be denied and
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should provide a solution. 
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, they could improve shared transport, preferring trains and electric vehicles so that the emissions are reduced. 
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, pedestrian areas could be built close
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historical places.
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measure could let us appreciate historical monuments without a car in sight.
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