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Living in a country where you have to speak in a foreign language can cause serious social problems as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Do you have difficulty writing a to what extent do you agree or disagree essay?

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Nowadays, it’s quite common to live in a country that uses a foreign
language
. Some argue that
this
 can create some significant social and practical issues. I completely agree with
this
 statement, and
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in
this
 essay I will discuss the reasons for
this
 and provide examples from my perspective. There are several issues that might be connected to
this
 issue. First , a person living in a country that uses a foreign
language
 might need time to adapt by listening and speaking in that
language
. If the people were not able to adapt, they would have a hard time doing their activities, including work or studying.
For instance
, I went to Japan for vacation 2
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 ago, and I’m really having a hard time using the Japanese
language
 since I
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 it before.
Furthermore
, because most Japanese people can’t speak English either, I need to use Google Translate whenever I try to communicate with them.
Furthermore
, the social issues that occur are related to the feeling of loneliness and isolation from society. By not being able to utilize the used
language
, the individuals could not be able to socialize normally, leading to a lack of social engagement.
Consequently
, the individuals might become stressed or depressed. In conclusion, I fully agree that living in a nation where you have to utilize certain foreign languages would cause social and practical problems.
However
, we can mitigate that by learning and adapting that specific foreign
language
.
Consequently
, we would be living comfortably quickly and easily.
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task achievement
To improve Task Response, ensure that your examples are both relevant and detailed enough to support your points. For instance, linking your personal experience in Japan more clearly to the broader argument would strengthen the essay.
coherence cohesion
For Coherence and Cohesion, work on providing a more fluent transition between ideas and sentences. This will help maintain a smooth flow throughout the essay.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which effectively frame the arguments and discussions.
task achievement
The main points are supported with relevant examples, which demonstrate a good understanding of the topic.
task achievement
There is a complete response to the task, addressing both social and practical problems related to living in a foreign country.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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