Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures

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, with the development of
the
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technology,
people
have more and more
accesses
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to many
music
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. Some
people
believe that
music
is beneficial to make
people
from various cultures and ages together. In my eyes, I totally
agree
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this
outlook.
Firstly
, it has been argued why I think
music
brings
people
get-together.
Although
the negative aspect of
music
must be taken into account, I still think
music
has in many ways enriched
people
's lives.
For example
, a well-known singer, Lucy Blair said"
People
are different because of different cultures and ages.
However
, the passion
about
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the
music
is
same
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the same
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, which
hence
brings
people
together
due to
this
common interest." It is
thus
clear
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shown that
music
plays
an
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vital role in improving the interpersonal relationship of different
people
.
Moreover
, another reason
should
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be considered is the financial reason. As for as society is concerned, the ultimate aim of society is to make
people
can enjoy the good thing at an affordable price.
For instance
, a recent article published in Nelosn Magazine revealed that it is cheap and even free to listen to a song.
Therefore
, various
people
can easily
to
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make a good friend with the person who
love
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the same
music
style. Undoubtedly, it is a clear indication that
music
brings
people
together.
To sum up
, I reckon
music
is beneficial to make
people
together. In order to make
this
world more harmonious, the government and
people
should make a concerted effort to find a solution.
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