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Some people think that cities are the best places to live. Others prefer to live in a rural area. Compare the advantages and disadvantages of living in the city to living in the countrysid.

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Living in cities has several advantages for everyone that they prefer to live in it. But, some
people
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 tend to live in villages just because of
indivigual
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individual
factor
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factors
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. So, they can be
cosidred
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considered
 their factor for choosing their place for living in anywhere that they like it. In point of my view, urbanization has some benefits for everyone that they can use of them for having a
comfort
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 life.
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, always there are
alot
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a lot
 of
apportunaties
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opportunities
 in different jobs that
the
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people
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 can choose
one
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of them
according to
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 their skills or family 's conditions and what they want to achieve their
intrests
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interests
incom
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income
.
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, there are a
numeroues
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numerous
 of facilities and necessary
equipments
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equipment
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 when
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people
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need
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 use it in
different
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a different
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situation
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situations
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.
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, Medical facilities,
variety
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a variety
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 of shopping, providing all things that they need
it
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apply
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and
the
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most important facilities
that
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is
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are
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an oppropriat
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oppropriat
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appropriate
 educational system for children. So, these factors are
main
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the main
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 causes for choosing urban for some
people
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.
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, the lack of each
these
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of these
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 factors can Face them with
a main problems
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main problems
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 in their life. But, some
people
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 tend to live in villages just
few
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a few
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 issues that
thoes
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those
 are more important of urban's factors.
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, using
the
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a
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 clean environment or having healthy food with the most
nutrition
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nutritious
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 ingredients and
farring
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farming
 of the Noise and other Items of
pullotion
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pollution
 that there are in cities.
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this
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 idea, rollers have
more
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a more
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 healthy lifestyle, but
to
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in
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 my
mind
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this
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 kind of lifestyle is suitable for
retieds
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retirees
. Because
,
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apply
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 they prefer to live in a calm place and avoid of every stress
atmosphier
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atmosphere
. Actually, cities always have a
variaty
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variety
 of stress that
are
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is
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 different for everyone.
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, in my opinion, living in
city
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a city
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 or countryside
depend
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depends
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 on the
people
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 's conditions, their
ages
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age
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 group and their
intrests
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interests
 that it would be
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 their expectations of
level
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the level
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 of
live
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life
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. Certainly, younger more prefer to live in
city
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the city
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 than older
people
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 just because of its opportunities
in
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for
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 jobs,
intertainments
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entertainment
entertainments
, education and stuff like
this
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.
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