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The government should spend money in promoting sport and art in school, rather than sponsoring professional sports and art events in communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#government #money #sport #art #school #sports #events #communities
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The investments devoted by the government to professional
sports
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 and
art
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 events in communities should be invested to promote
sports
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 and
art
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 in school. In my opinion, I agree that
sport
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 and
art
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 ought to be sponsored by the government as they will greatly benefit
society
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. A good reason to promote
sports
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 activities in education organizations is that it helps to raise a healthy nation. If more
people
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 tend to do
sport
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 , a healthier
society
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 will be created . Healthy habits should be cultivated from early childhood. Healthy communities impact wealthy economics. Not only
sport
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 should be promoted in school but
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art
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.
Art
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 is one of the ancient forms of human development.
Due to
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art
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people
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 educate, and develop their taste, creativity, vision and even spiritual side of humans. By learning
art
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 since childhood
people
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 understand the values of
society
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, it affects their future lives
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 building relationships, raising children and contributing to
society
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. Needless to say that educated nation is priceless capital for any country.
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, if the government promotes
sport
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 and
art
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 in schools it could attract tourists abroad and immigrants. It is very common nowadays to send children to study abroad and usually deliberate parents choose the places teaching not only general subjects but
also
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art
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 and
sport
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. Today
art
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 becomes popular
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hundreds of years ago when it just started to attract an audience.
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, there are different
sports
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 clubs that engaged
people
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 around the world and children are those audiences who could learn as being big fans of
sports
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.
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