The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.
The figure illustrates the process
how
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of how
sugar
is produced from sugar
canes
. Overall
, it can be divided into three main stages, which are harvesting, purifying and drying.
At first,
it takes 12 to 18 months for sugar
canes
to mature Fix the agreement mistake
cane
in
the farm. After that, those matured Change preposition
on
suger
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sugar
canes
are able to be harvested neither manually or
mechanically. Replace the word
nor
At
the second stage of the process, those collected crops are sent into the Change preposition
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grind
machine to produce juice by crushing and squeezing them. Change the verb form
grinding
Then
the juice derived from sugar
canes
will be purified by the limestone filter.
What's more, after Fix the agreement mistake
cane
heated
in the evaporator, the purified juice becomes syrup that we need. Wrong verb form
heating
Then
we will use the centrifuge to separate sugar
crystals from syrup to get rid of those unnecessary elements. Finally
, with the drying and cooling procedures, those
syrup becomes Correct determiner usage
the
sugar
in a container.Submitted by james801004 on
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