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Some people believe that the use of mobile phones in public is annoying as smoking and should be banned. Do you agree or disagree?

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Uses of mobile
phones
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 in public
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 is disliked by some masses and they opine that it is as intolerable as smoking and
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 should be prohibited. I partially agree with
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 situation as speaking loudly in public sometimes causes very embarrassing situations
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, it should not be strictly banned in consideration of the case of an emergency. To start with,
although
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 public
use
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 of mobile
phones
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 is very common everywhere it has some disadvantages. Public mobile
phone
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use
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 can lead to several unavoidable situations ,especially in public transport, hospitals and educational institutions.
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, when
people
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 speak loudly on their mobile
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 or watch a video with a high sound it sometimes causes sound pollution and hampers the concentration of the surrounding
people
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. To add to it, it is very dangerous for those who are talking on a mobile
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while
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 crossing the road or driving. That type of carelessness causes road accidents and even lifeless. A recent study based on RMIT University illustrates that an average of 20 per cent of road accidents are caused by using mobile
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while
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 driving.
On the contrary
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, the full prohibition of mobile
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use
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 in public
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 has some drawbacks as well. If mobile
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 are prohibited in public
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 in case of emergency it would be very hard to contact security or any family members.
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, a lot of crime is happening especially in urban areas.
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, without a mobile
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 contacting with police would be impossible.
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, public transport apps are mostly used by
people
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 through mobile so commuting would be impossible without the
use
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 of mobile
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.
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, around 67% of
people
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 are using mobile
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 for transport issues.
To conclude
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, using a mobile
phone
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 cannot be totally prohibited like smoking in public
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 because of its various uses.
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, it should be under control to escape unavoidable situations.

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