IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 6.5

Some people believe that nowsdays, we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #nowsdays #choices
Options where is from generation to generation in
this
 contemporary the possibilities are in demand and it is an act of choosing something freely. I completely agree with the statement. I believe choice builds up a personality
as well as
,an individual can easily pick up his favourite subject.
Due to
 the latest technology, modern innovation helps society to build up a personality With varieties in each product either related to households or clothes.
For instance
,
due to
 variations in items a person can buy his desired product anywhere in the world in
a
Change the article
an
show examples
 effort able prices just search for a product on the Internet and can
also
 order online from any website for a limited time period and
also
 get some discounts.
Furthermore
, students face very critical situations
while
 selecting the course of their studies at the university level. But now they can easily choose any subject by knowing its demand in future.
For instance
, a decade ago, students have only limited options for studying at higher levels
as well as
, in schools. So now they have discrepancies in the adaptions of subjects and other things.
While
on the other hand
, there are those who disagree and feel that choices make humans confused between a lot of products. To epitome, senior citizens spent their entire time selecting something
according to
 their taste when they buy something from shopping malls because at their time there are not many possibilities for products. And they became nervous and confused
while
 selecting something. To add on, through variation the people forget their original status. They prefer to wear Western dresses even at parties and weddings. If there is no variation in items
then
 society engaged with their culture always selects things that are on a a regular basis and can purchase everything at a reasonable price. In a nutshell, I would like to articulate choices are more avail as compared to the past making people updated and improving their lifestyle and taste.
Submitted by aqsagoraya9 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: