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The below shows how the Australian Bureau of Meterorology collets up-to-the-minute information on the weather in order to produce reliable forecasts. Write a report for a university lecturer decribing the information shown below.

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The figure illustrates the
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 used by the Australian Bureau of Meteorology to forecast the
weather
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. There are four stages in the
process
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, beginning with the collection of
information
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 about the
weather
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.
This
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information
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 is
then
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 analysed, prepared for presentation, and
finally
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 broadcast to the public. Looking at the first and second stages of the
process
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, there are three ways of collecting
weather
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 data and three ways of analysing it.
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, incoming
information
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 can be received by satellite and presented for analysis as a satellite photo. The same data can
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 be passed to a
radar
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 station and presented on a
radar
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 screen or synoptic chart.
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, incoming
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 may be collected directly by
radar
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 and analysed on a
radar
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 screen or synoptic chart.
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, drifting buoys
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 receive data which can be shown on a synoptic chart.
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 the third stage of the
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, the
weather
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 broadcast is prepared on computers.
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, it is delivered to the public on television, on the radio, or as a recorded telephone announcement.

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