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Some believe that younger family members should be legally responsible for supporting older family members when they become physically, mentally and financially unable to look after themselves. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some societies nowadays have lost their sense of
responsibility
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 for the well-being of older family members, preferring to leave their elderly relatives in specialised government establishments.
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 there is a serious concern about whether certain
rules
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 should be imposed on young generations to oblige them to look after their
parents
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, I would argue that it is sufficient for
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responsibility
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 to remain at the cultural level. On one side, it feels correct that young
people
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 should be responsible for supporting their
parents
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 and other elderly generations. During their youth,
parents
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 put a great effort into providing their children with a good environment in terms of their education, food and healthcare,
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 deserving a similar level of care later in life.
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, imposing strict
rules
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 for the support of older
people
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 would break the fundamental concept of democracy.
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, countries that create
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rules
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 can no longer be counted as democratic.
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, it will
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 raise an array of nuances.
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,
people
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 who were abandoned in childhood could be sued by their biological
parents
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 for lack of attention, which makes
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 rule unfair. Another problem is that
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 regulations would make supporting elderly
people
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 a burden and a chore rather than the result of personal care. In countries where
rules
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 oblige
people
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 to look after their elderly family members, natural love between children and
parents
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 gradually evaporates, becoming a sense of legal obligation.
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, it is more appropriate for governments to propagate the feeling of
responsibility
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 by means of TV programs or other media sources to preserve a healthy relationship between young and older generations rather than by setting
rules
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. In a nutshell, it is true that some moral standards,
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 as the
responsibility
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 to care for elderly
people
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, are fading away from some societies, requiring specific actions to be taken.
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, I believe
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 standards should never reach outside the boundaries of culture and become a legal obligation of a citizen.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • filial piety
  • elder care
  • aging population
  • public resources
  • state welfare
  • financial burden
  • legal mandate
  • family dynamics
  • moral responsibility
  • residency
  • integrity
  • dependency
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