These days, more fathers's stay at home and take care of their children, and mothers go to work.

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Over the
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two or three decades, gender roles are being exchanged as time goes by. It means more and more men stay at home and take care of kids compared to the past.
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may happen because of the increase
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popularity among
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employees. In my
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this
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is a positive development and in
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essay, I will explain it deeply.
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, there is an exceedingly increasing number of
women
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who have been well-known companies' executives or senior Managers
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of their male
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counterparts
. Undoubtedly,
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occurs because
women
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are traditionally supposed to be good at
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.
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, they can do several things
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the same time perfectly because of their versatile characteristic instinctively.
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, proven by statistics, approximately more than sixty per cent of brand companies which have high profits annually, have
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female workforce in the USA.
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,
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now is aware of mothers' excellent gifts and utilize these genders' power to
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.
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, there is no doubt that It is a positive progress as
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are not labelled with
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responsibilities anymore which was a part of social convention among traditional people who had insisted on role division
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such
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typical stereotypes are not common among modern families. For illustrate, two out of every five parents have changed roles and
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women
become breadwinners which
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proven that not only does it enhance couples'
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but it
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has positive mental effects on children and
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, mothers can put aside a large array of time for both their children and their part partners
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of male breadwinners. In conclusion,
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are
choosen
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chosen
by companies because of their Multi-tasking and versatile characteristics. The situation
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has
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several useful Impacts on family
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which can not be compared to male breadwinners.
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