Having more money and less free time is better than earning less money and having more free time. Discuss both the views and state your opinion.

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time
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and
money
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has changed over
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of
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in the human
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life. There was an
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argument
between that earning
huge
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a huge
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amount of salary and spending less
time
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for
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lesiure
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leisure
. And,
other
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the other
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hand, taking more free
time
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and having less amount. Let us discuss both
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points, and
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finally
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I will provide my view on
this
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. On the one hand,
now a days
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nowadays
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people
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started living as
an
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nuclear family rather than
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a united
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family.
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is the vital reason
as
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people
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push to earn more
money
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and spend less free
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with their
families
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, as
people
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started living as
nuclear
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a nuclear
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family, the cost of living raised high, and
also
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they need to take care
both
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of both
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medical
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the medical
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expenses of their parents and
childrens
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children
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.
Additional
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, the
children
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's educational
cost
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costs
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becoming higher and higher. Considering all these factors,
people
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have to earn more
money
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and they do not have much free
time
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with their
families
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.
On the other hand
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, in the same generation, there are
people
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who spend more free
time
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with their
families
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and they are so
concered
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concerned
on
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about
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the
childern's
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children's
growth.
Due to
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this
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,
children
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will learn more from their parents like confidence, and they will create more memories in their
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lives
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.
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, If the
parnets
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parents
, spend
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with their
children
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's school and college functions, they will be more encouraged and they built confidence as parents are
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nearby
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.
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will be the welfare for the
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's growth, which is more important rather than
earn
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earning
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more
money
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. In my view, it is purely based on the situational requirements of
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each
indiviudals
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individual
who are going spend more and less
money
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, having less and more free
time
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with their
families
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. In conclusion, to meet the
finacial
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financial
burdens,
the
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people
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should spend less free
time
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and earn more
money
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. There are
people
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who are more
concern
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concerned
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on
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about
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the growth of their
childern
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children
will
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and will
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earn less
money
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and spend more
time
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with their
families
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial security
  • facilitating
  • lifestyle
  • professional development
  • increased stress
  • work-life balance
  • hobbies
  • quality time
  • physical and mental health
  • financial constraints
  • luxury items
  • overall well-being
  • personal growth
  • middle ground
  • sacrificing
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