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Some people think the cheap air flight gives ordinary people more freedom. However, others think that cheap air flights should be banned because it pollutes the air and brings many problems. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Introduction
There are many
people
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 who do not have an opportunity to
travel
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 abroad even in cheap
airlines
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,
while
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 some individuals
travel
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 in first or business class.
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, it is undeniable that cheap
air
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flights
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 create more freedom for most
people
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,
while
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 some argue that cheap
air
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flights
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 have a huge impact on the
environment
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,
such
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 as
air
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pollution
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.
This
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 essay will illustrate both perspectives and provide an opinion.
Body paragraph 1
Firstly
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, low-cost
airlines
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 can save lots of money for ordinary
people
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. To support
this
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, there are many citizens who want to
travel
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 abroad for vacation but have a fixable budget,
this
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 reason makes ordinary cannot
travel
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 abroad because of the expensive
flights
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.
However
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, they can control their budget by travelling with cheap
airlines
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, which creates an opportunity for them to spend money on accommodation and places.
For example
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, the tickets that are booked 6 months in advance will be cheaper than the ticket
that is
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 purchased one day before the flight.
Body paragraph 2
On the other hand
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, some believe that cheap
flights
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 bring many problems
such
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 as
air
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pollution
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. Using an old engine increases more
opportunities
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opportunity
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 to have accidents and increasing in
air
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pollution
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.
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, an old engine releases more carbon dioxide through the atmosphere, and some of the old engines cannot be used because of broken materials.
Body paragraph 3
In my opinion, affordable
airlines
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 should be banned in society.
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, Everyone should take responsibility to save the
environment
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 and reduce
air
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pollution
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.
However
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, ordinary
people
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 can easily book cheap tickets by making an advance booking.
Conclusion
To conclude
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, everyone should take responsibility to save the
environment
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 by banning cheap
air
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flights
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.
This
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 is because it creates many impacts on the
environment
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. I suggest that the government should reduce taxes on
airlines
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, which makes ordinary
people
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 pay for cheaper prices.

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