The diagram below shows the manufacturing procesd for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons wherw relevant.
As an introduction, the process below illustrates the procedure of manufacturing sugar for distribution, using the mother plant called sugar cane.
As we can see, it contains seven major steps from growing plants to
get
the final product, which we consume. Wrong verb form
getting
However
, for simplification, the first two procedures is
being conducted in the land and the rest in the factories.
Change the verb form
are
Firstly
, the sugar cane needs to be grown, which takes about 12 to 18 months to become a mature plant. Then
the harvesting will be done using both machines and manual workers. Thereafter
the harvested goods will be processed in the factories, and these will be crushed with the use of equipments
to get the juice. As the next step, the obtained juice should be purified with the help of limestone filters, and Change the wording
equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
then
evaporate with heating, which will result in a
syrup Remove the article
apply
instead
of juice. Furthermore
, they seperatecrystals
from Correct your spelling
separate crystals
this
syrup by centrifugation , and finally
, the centrifuged product will be dried and cooled to get the final item, which will be sent for consumption by people.Submitted by anushka75 on
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