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Living in big cities is bad for people’s health. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#cities #people’s #health
Even though living in metropolitan areas provides plenty of opportunities for each individual to thrive, many still argue that
this
 is
also
 a double-edged sword as it can result in negative effects on the community’s
health
. In my opinion, I partially agree with
this
 statement for the following reasons presented in
this
 essay. On the one hand, it is understandable why many individuals hold the view that life in urban zones takes its toll on their citizens’ well-being.
To begin
 with, it is the appeal of a modern and sufficient life in big cities that results in overcrowding.
This
 leads to a higher chance of getting pollution problems related to air, water, noise, visual, … in urban zones compared to others.
Consequently
, people are prone to suffer from several
health
 issues caused by contaminated environments from frequent colds or flu, skin diseases, and respiratory diseases to more severe ones, cancer. Another factor that affects urban dwellers’ well-being is mental
health
 issues like stress or depression. Many people, especially those from the low and middle class, admit that they often get stressed from their competitive and demanding job with long hours of work, consuming the time for severe traffic jams or feeling pressured and depressed to maintain a high living standard in big cities. In the longer term,
this
 can cause detrimental impacts on both the mental and physical conditions of the residents.
On the other hand
, apart from the obvious disadvantages mentioned above, I
also
 believe that the community's
health
 can benefit from living in megacities. Urban dwellers have better access to high-quality medical services, which is a big difficulty for residents living in small towns or undeveloped remote areas. Hospitals in cities with advanced medical equipment
as well as
 experienced and competent doctors are available to give better treatment to patients.
Besides
, people who live in urban areas can go to shopping malls or any entertainment facilities to relieve stress at the weekend.
This
 is
also
 an effective way to reduce the severe consequences of current mental issues which sometimes can not be treated by only medicine. In conclusion, I believe that living in a big metropolis can bring about negative effects on dwellers'
health
, but it
also
 provides beneficial healthcare in some ways.
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