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These days undocumented immigrants are a big problem. What are the reasons for this, and how could the problem be solved?

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A generation ago, moving
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civil to other
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 was not a big issue.
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, come
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today, several
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 most developed
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 trouble.
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 civil war and
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,
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and economical
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economical
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 issues. Many
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 must save their lives
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 conflicts of
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taking place in their country. Take Syria and Iraq
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, the most terrible civil wars are happening
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there. The solution is for the governments of these
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 and
United
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 trouble and reconcile fighting forces and suggest agreements. Another
problem
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 is that
people
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 live in difficult economic conditions. It can cause
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people
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 leave their
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.
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,
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 degree of Mexico is lower than the United
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.
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, many Mexicans break into
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the border
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 of the United
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 of America
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 poverty. The solution is for the United
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 and Mexico must agree
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 other and
government
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 of Mexico must increase
economics
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 of
country
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. I can cause stopping immigration.
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, undocumented immigrants
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 become a global
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 that
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worries
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the government
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 of many
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due to
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it`s
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 danger.
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, several civil wars and economic crisis
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 that trouble.
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 is a serious
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, and if we do not solve it,
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 of that issue will get stronger than now. My view is that the main responsibility for solving the
problem
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 lies with
governments
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the governments
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 of
countries
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 which increased immigration and
United
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the United
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 Nations Union.

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