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Some people think that electric cars are important for us, while others think that they are expensive. Discuss both sides of view and give your own opinion

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The issue of electric
cars
 has been controversial. Some people believe that they are costly,
whereas
 I agree with those who think that they are crucial for human life in the present
world
. On the one hand, it is commonly believed that electric
cars
 are expensive items. One of the most important reasons is that they are new innovations which will be replaced with older ones since people have been used over the
last
 decade,
additionally
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 they are not generally in the market
world
, so the price is still high.
For example
,
according to
 the latest survey conducted by Bangkok University, it revealed that 80% of drivers who have owned a car tend to use the existing one because they do not want to spend a huge amount of money on a car which uses clean energy. Having said that, price plays a major role in buying electric
cars
.
On the other hand
, it seems to me that electric
cars
 are crucial to human lives in the present
world
 and toward the future. The most significant reason is the fact that electric
cars
 are clean energy. It means those
cars
 will not release more carbon monoxide into the atmosphere which causes global warming issues. To illustrate
this
, it has been reported that 80% of developed countries in Europe have promoted using electric
cars
,
as a
result
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this
 can reduce the carbon monoxide release rate by more than 65%. I agree with
this
 point because global warming is a critical
world
 issue, so
this
 trend is very important for humanity. In conclusion, having considered both sides of
this
 issue,
although
 electric
cars
 are luxury items, I agree with those who think that they are important for humanity in terms of sustainable development
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • climate change
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • carbon footprint
  • fossil fuel-driven vehicles
  • environmental organizations
  • air quality
  • global climate goals
  • initial purchase price
  • batteries
  • charging infrastructure
  • range anxiety
  • operating costs
  • financially accessible
  • technology advances
  • government incentives
  • transition to electric vehicles
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