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In order to study at university, students are required to pay expensive tuition fees. Not all students can afford them, so some people think that university education should be free for everyone. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Undeniably,
education
 should be a right, not an advantage.
Fees
 for higher
education
 are expensive and not affordable for everyone, so
according to
 some,
university
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 should be free for all people regardless of their background. In my opinion, I agree that
university
education
 ought to be free as it will greatly benefit both individuals and
society
. A good reason to abolish
university
fees
 is that it gives people, whether they are rich or poor, equal rights. At present,
students
 from poorer backgrounds 9'Are prevented from entering
university
 because they are unable to pay the
fees
.
This
 excludes a large proportion of
society
 and is discriminatory,
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which
 can be avoided by putting an end to tuition
fees
. Another point to consider is that having no
fees
 at
university
 means that
students
 will no longer have to work at the same time as studying to cover their costs.
For example
, many
students
 have to work either full-time or part-time
while
 studying to pay the
fees
. Free higher
education
 should,
therefore
, produce better results, and
students
 will be able to afford to apply themselves to their studies exclusively.
Finally
,
university
education
 will benefit
society
 in the long run for the simple reason that it will open higher
education
 to a wider section of the population.
This
 will result in
increasing
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 the number of educated people.
In other words
, having a great resource of skilled and knowledgeable professionals will bring greater rewards to
society
 as a whole.
Moreover
, it can bring more economic advantages to a country that shows itself to be prosperous and leading in various fields. In conclusion, free
university
education
 is a must for any country that values equal rights and one that wishes to advance The cost of free
education
 will be recouped many times over by the benefits it brings.
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