More and more wild animals are on the verge of extinction and others are on the endangered list. what are the reasons for this ? what can be done to solve the problem ?

It is true that over the past years, a number of wild
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have become extinct.
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is happening and put forward several solutions to
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issue. One of the many reasons why a variety of species
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become extinct is the careless hunt done by humans over the
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decades
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individuals think of it as a sport or a hobby and brag amongst each other who hunted the most;
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, the number of wild
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killed every year has grown increasingly
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has led to the extinction of some.
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, the destruction of natural habitats throughout the planet has been one of the main causes of
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have been working there without any restrictions
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, natural habitats
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as rainforests have not been the same anymore
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, in the Amazon rainforest
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companies have destroyed dozens of trees. To address
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should launch and fund new wildlife parks and put at their disposal the best staff and equipment to look after the
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of
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, in Congo, local councils have launched the construction of several parks.
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, nations should introduce new laws regarding the protection of natural habitats to forbid for once and for all
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investment of big companies in those places,
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, impose taxes on
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have already invested in those areas and use that money in order to repair the damage that has
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made.
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I have discussed, there are various causes for the extinction of wild
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, and steps need to be taken to tackle
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problem.

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structure
Use a clear plan: start with a short intro, then give causes, then solutions, then a short end. Each paragraph should have one main idea.
coherence
Link ideas well. Use words like first, then, also, but, however, and finally. Try not to make one long sentence.
content
Give more clear facts or examples for each point. One good example in each part helps a lot.
grammar
Check tone and grammar. Use a formal style for an IELTS essay.
vocabulary
Be exact about ideas. Do not use facts without proof and avoid loose claims.
editing
Check spell and punctuation. Capitalize the first word of each sentence.
structure
The plan is clear: you say what you will talk about, then discuss cause and fix.
coherence
You use linking words to show flow.

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