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Some expert believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondry school.do the advantages of this outweight the disadvantage?

#expert #children #language #school #secondry #outweight
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 are learning foreign languages,
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mainly
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 they are beginning primary school,
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at learning
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this
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 psychology. Many
children
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foreign
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 young time. We are teaching
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children
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 interesting pictures and books. Same
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foreign
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 atmosphere. If parents and relatives are speaking
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,
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kindergarten
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. So
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foregn
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 in kindergarten. But some
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 expensive.
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learning
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a foregn
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foregn
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because
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know all things. For
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 selected two
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children
15
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are 15
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 years old' second
children
25
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are 25
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yers
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years
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 old.
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 they are giving simple
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. Young
children
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finished
 very fast but they are finding a lot of
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mistakes
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children
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children
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 tell in history. If you build
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forcing
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children
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 next teachers. You
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