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Many museums charge for admission whiles others are free. Do you think the advantages for admission outweigh the disadvantages

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Every museum has its own mode of operation across the globe. Whiles some may require an entry bill, others may render service for free. I believe that charging entry fees will help with its operation. On the one hand, when these institutions charge for admission, it deters the less privileged from visiting and gaining some experience. A lot of people are unable to visit various historic buildings because the amount charged may be too expensive to afford.
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, during excursions in various schools, some school children are unable to join because looking at the entrance cost and some other charges for the excursion, their parents may not be able to afford.
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 can be disadvantageous to them because the visit would have helped them understand so some topics in school better.
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 permitting free access to these galleries will grant each and every interested person the opportunity to have an experience.
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, it is best for salons to charge for admission as it helps in the generation of funds for maintenance purposes. Some of the generated funds are used to conduct various renovation and maintenance works.
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 helps to maintain the beauty and purpose of the museums the monies allocated by the government to these institutions are less than enough to achieve
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 purpose.
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, institutions are able to pay their staff through the collected admission monies.
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 in effect helps with the smooth running of the salon because it is unlikely for their staff to go on strike over unpaid salaries. In summary, even though charging an entry fee may prevent the less privileged from being able to visit , l believe it worth noting that these fees help with the maintenance
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 payment of salaries of workers.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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