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Robots and artificial intelligence are being developed to replace humans in the work place. why is this hapenning? Do you think this will have a positive or negative impact on society?

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Nowadays, the development of technology has changed many aspects of human life, especially in the work environment. Technology can make tasks easier, even
robots
 and artificial intelligence are used d to replace humans in the workplace. In
this
 essay, I will give my opinion about the positive or negative impact on society. One of the main causes why
robots
 and artificial intelligence are being developed
to
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is to
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 replace communities in the workplace. It can help people make work easier in terms of time-saving.
Due to
 the fact that machines can take care of the bulk of assignments,
thus
, giving individuals more time to complete more tasks.
For example
, in Japan, the hospital has many sophisticated equipment for surgery, which can help the doctors have more time to prepare for surgery efficiently, and the hospital can accept many patients.
On the other hand
, the using of
robots
 and artificial intelligence
also
 has negative impacts on society's lives. The various conveniences that are offered by
robots
, can cause the reduction of labour in a company and other workplaces. The people will lose their jobs, and there will be a lot of unemployment
while
 life necessities will always increase. Some benefits may be offered by the improvement of technology.
However
, the using of
robots
 will add higher costs than employees. The
robots
 need routine maintenance funds.
Moreover
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robot production is not as good as humans in some aspects. The quality of human performance is better than
robots
 in some fields. In conclusion, there are positive and negative impacts of the development of using
robots
 in all aspects of the public. Humans must be wiser in using robotics so that it remains effective and efficient without reducing quality.
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coherence cohesion
Organize ideas more clearly and ensure each paragraph has a clear main point supported by evidence or examples.
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Work on developing more specific examples to back up the points you make.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are well-presented, providing a clear overview of the topic and summarizing the main points effectively.
task achievement
You demonstrate awareness of both the positive and negative aspects of robotics and AI in the workplace.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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