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In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting University studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for people who decide to do this.

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Some countries persuade youngsters to gain
work
 or
travel
experience
 within the period of rounding up secondary school and entry into a University.
This
 essay will discuss the merits which are contributing to the workforce of the nation,help them to concentrate when they resume studies and demerits including lack of skills and immaturity to cope with life
experience
. On the one hand, when young folks finish high school they tend to be more vibrant and active and in
this
 way when they go for
this
 365-day
work
experience
 they tend to contribute enormously to the workforce of the nation.
For instance
, if these students join a particular firm and
work
 with them the production output will tend to be higher than before and
consequently
 boosting the national economy.
Furthermore
, when these students
travel
 to visit other destinations it will help them to clear their brains and
also
 have a free mind that will help them concentrate on the new challenge ahead of them, which is obtaining a degree certificate.
On the other hand
, I would say these young kids are not mature enough to
travel
 not alone to
work
 in an organization or company. Moreso,they do not have the needed skills that are required by them to carry out a particular assignment or
work
. In conclusion, Few countries persuade youngsters to gain
work
 and
travel
experience
 after rounding up secondary school prior to entry into university.
This
 has some pros and cons,some of the merits are boosting the national economy and having a clear mind to concentrate on studies.Among the demerits includes; immaturity and lack of skills.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural immersion
  • Life experience
  • Work ethic
  • Career readiness
  • Self-discovery
  • Delayed gratification
  • Intellectual stagnation
  • Financial implications
  • Social dynamics
  • Academic trajectory
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