Some parents buy their children whatever they ask for and Allow their children to do whatever they want. Is this a good way to raise children? What consequences could this style of parenting have for children as they get older?

These
worlds
are so fortunate to have all they want and ever request by some
parents
which is not a good
method
of bringing up our world,
however
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this
method
of nurturing these
worlds
adopted by some
parents
could lead to maladjustments in the
future
. There is an adage that says, as you lay your bed, so you will lie on it. Meaning it is the way you train your world
that is
what they will grow up to be. A child you never train to struggle to meet up for his/her want will never know how to struggle to do that for themselves in the
future
. They never experience lack, so how do they want to copy when things are hard with their
parents
or when they are not rich as their
parents
.
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These children will always depend on them at all times because all they want or request are always met by their
parents
.
However
,
this
nurturing
method
adopted by some
parents
leads to maladjustments in which these
worlds
would not be able to cope with any situations they find themselves in the
future
without
parents
or someone's intervention because they have been trained to always depend on people for their want. Sometimes in the
,
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subsequent if their want is not met, some of these
worlds
will go to the extent of stealing because it's difficult for them to meet what they want. They can never appreciate the lack because they never experience it. They see
parents
who couldn't provide for their
worlds
as irresponsible
parents
. In conclusion, the
method
of nurturing
this
world adopted by some
parents
by providing all they want and the request is never a good
method
and could lead to maladjustments in the
future
.
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  • indulgent
  • entitlement
  • discipline
  • responsibility
  • nurturing
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  • adversity
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