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Some people fail in school, but end up being successful in life. Why do you think that is the case? What is the most important thing to succeed in life?

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Many
people
 who achieved stupendous
success
 in
life
 were not academically brilliant
students
. If we look around, we can
also
 see that many class toppers eventually fail miserably in
life
.
This
 is probably because most
skills
 taught at
school
 are not useful for
success
 in
life
. In fact, in the real world, a person’s
success
 depends on their ability to persevere and learn from their mistakes. In order to achieve
success
 in
school
, one only needs the ability to memorize a lot of things.
Students
 who revise their lessons regularly and do not mind spending a lot of time on their homework can easily top their class. Many of these
students
 will achieve tremendous
success
 later in their
life
 because they learned the importance of hard work at
school
 itself.
On the other hand
,
students
 who failed in
school
 can
also
 achieve great
success
 in
life
 provided that they have certain
skills
.
For example
, in order to be a successful actor, singer, dancer, writer or athlete, one does not need good marks in
school
. Rather, what one needs are some innate talent and the ability to hone it constantly. In the same way, good academic grades are not usually necessary to start a business. In fact, there are several sectors beyond the academic realm where
success
 does not require good marks. Despite being failures in
school
,
people
 who possess sharp business acumen, inborn talent or good communication
skills
 can achieve
success
 in their chosen field. They are not hindered by their poor grades and once they achieve a certain level of
success
 they can easily hire academically brilliant
people
 to solve their problems and accelerate their growth. In conclusion,
people
 who fail in
school
 can
also
 achieve
success
 in
life
 because
school
 is not the place where all the useful
skills
 are taught or learned. In fact, many valuable
skills
 are learned from experience and
people
 who demonstrate a willingness to work hard and a strong urge to achieve
success
 will eventually achieve it regardless of whether they were brilliant
students
 or not.
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