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Some people fail in school, but end up being successful in life. Why do you think that is the case? What is the most important thing to succeed in life?

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Many
people
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 who achieved stupendous
success
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 in
life
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 were not academically brilliant
students
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. If we look around, we can
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 see that many class toppers eventually fail miserably in
life
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.
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 is probably because most
skills
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 taught at
school
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 are not useful for
success
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 in
life
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. In fact, in the real world, a person’s
success
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 depends on their ability to persevere and learn from their mistakes. In order to achieve
success
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 in
school
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, one only needs the ability to memorize a lot of things.
Students
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 who revise their lessons regularly and do not mind spending a lot of time on their homework can easily top their class. Many of these
students
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 will achieve tremendous
success
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 later in their
life
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 because they learned the importance of hard work at
school
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 itself.
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,
students
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 who failed in
school
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 can
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 achieve great
success
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 in
life
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 provided that they have certain
skills
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.
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, in order to be a successful actor, singer, dancer, writer or athlete, one does not need good marks in
school
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. Rather, what one needs are some innate talent and the ability to hone it constantly. In the same way, good academic grades are not usually necessary to start a business. In fact, there are several sectors beyond the academic realm where
success
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 does not require good marks. Despite being failures in
school
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,
people
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 who possess sharp business acumen, inborn talent or good communication
skills
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 can achieve
success
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 in their chosen field. They are not hindered by their poor grades and once they achieve a certain level of
success
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 they can easily hire academically brilliant
people
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 to solve their problems and accelerate their growth. In conclusion,
people
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 who fail in
school
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 can
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 achieve
success
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 in
life
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 because
school
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 is not the place where all the useful
skills
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 are taught or learned. In fact, many valuable
skills
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 are learned from experience and
people
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 who demonstrate a willingness to work hard and a strong urge to achieve
success
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 will eventually achieve it regardless of whether they were brilliant
students
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 or not.
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