You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child's development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words

Various controversies have emerged as to whether
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at home or
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to
school
is best for children's future development. In the following paragraphs, I will introduce the benefits of both
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,
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and elaborate on my point of
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about
this
issue. Going to
school
are
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recognise
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as
a
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important step
of
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socialization
. By making friends and socializing with different kinds of people
such
as teachers and
classsmates
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classmates
,
students
can learn how to interact with people. Without the process of
socialization
,
students
may face conflicts with boss or communication problems with colleagues.
Moreover
,
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is one of the most important factors during the growing process of
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children
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.
last
but not least, teachers, professors and education resources from
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especially in
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education system are imperative in studying.
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to going to
school
, teaching children at home is proven to be more efficient than going to
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school
. Parents can design the
study
program especially for their kids taking the best care of their
study
.
Secondly
, different from
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schedule
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like
school
, studying at home gives
students
more flexible times to
study
and touch what they are interested
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specialize in. In my point of view, I consider educated in
school
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a better choice for children. Take my personal experience
for example
, almost
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entire
socialization
progresses of me are developed in
school
,
such
as joining a club, attending an exchange program and being a leader of my class.
Moreover
,
according to
the
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,
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relationship
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relationships
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and
connection
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with people is not only important for
socialization
but
also
for
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growing
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.
Finally
, as a college student, the resources that
school
gives me
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a
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indispensible
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indispensable
materials
of
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my
study
.
Overall
, I think
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to
school
is definitely a better choice for
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future development.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • homeschooling
  • traditional schooling
  • development
  • individualized education
  • flexibility
  • scheduling
  • one-on-one attention
  • learning style
  • pace
  • safe and controlled learning environment
  • practical learning
  • negative influences
  • socialization
  • teamwork skills
  • diverse perspectives
  • independence
  • time management
  • qualified teachers
  • specialized resources
  • extracurricular activities
  • sense of community
  • hybrid approach
  • personality
  • striking a balance
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