The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014.

The graph below shows the number of books

read by men and women at Burnaby Public

Library from 2011 to 2014.
This
line chart depicts How many
books
which were read by both genders at Burnaby Public Library during four years from 2011 to 2014. 
Overall
, It is clear from the graph that the rate of reading
books
had
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increased during the period. Men read nearly 3000
books
in 2011, which was much lower than women’s. The next year the rate increased gradually. But
then
, the number of
books
read by men increased dramatically during the
last
years
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. Accounting
an
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incensement of six thousand
books
per year till it reached 16000
books
in 2014. Women read two thousand
books
more than men in 2011.
Then
, for 2012 and 2013, the figure increased smoothly till the number was the same as for men’s. Surprisingly, the rate fall to 8000 in 2014 before it had reached 10000 the year before.
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