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Many students find it difficult to focus or pay attention at school nowadays. What are the reason for this? What can be done to solve the problem.

#students #focus #attention #school #reason
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In the modern era, several
students
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 could not concentrate on their academic
subjects
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 at school. There are several causes for
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 issue,
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, in my view of point, it might be solved by some practical approach. As the
subjects
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 of the class that are taught are very theoretic and logical,
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 as math, and science, they are unable to draw the
students
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' attention.
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, nowadays, there are several acts that pupils are more likely to be distracted, including video, digital games, social media, etc.
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 to say, those education programs are not as attractive as those disrupted activities.
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,
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 are at the age at which they would like to spend their time playing with their peers
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 of
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 in the class and listening to boring courses.
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, in the present day, a wide variety of
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 are aware of their talent and abilities, which leads to following their hubby and ignoring the importance of educational
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. To tackle
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 calamity, I suggest three resolutions. First, educational officials should provide productive and stimulating
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subjects concept
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 to their
students
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, which encourages them to focus .
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, they should teach science via practical playing, or showing trendy videos or games.
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, They are to educate several contents by using nature,
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 as science, and history.
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, they should discover the tendency of each student and apply them to prepare for competitive environments, which make the
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 situation. In conclusion,
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 true folks find it difficult to pay attention in classes,
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, employing some attractive trends to absorb their attention, might be constructive, like, stimulating areas, education
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 playing and entertainment.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Attention span
  • Distraction
  • Sleep hygiene
  • Mental health support
  • Interactive learning
  • Experiential learning
  • Project-based learning
  • Academic pressures
  • Stress management
  • Healthy eating habits
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