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There is an increasing trend around the world of married couple deciding not to have children. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for couple who decide to do this.

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Marriage is
one
 of the
responsibility
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responsibilities
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 to have as a couple with
more
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 understanding and lovable nature. Having a baby makes it more precious and
also
clumpsy
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clumsy
 sometimes to pick up the pace
in
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between the two. In my
opinion
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this
 is a debatable issue which carries both pros and cons into it. The below paragraph shows some of those substantiated into it. On the
one
 hand, not being pregnant is very suitable
to
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 those people who are working all the time. They indulge
into
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 it and with a very ambitious nature and goals, they ignore the pregnancy thing. It's a very huge responsibility of feeding them and nurturing them a lot which makes them
occupiedall
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occupied all
 the time.
Consequently
, they have to leave all work aside so as to experience motherhood. The benefits
being
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 never having
this
 major thing on mind if they don't plan it
accordingly
 and the other thing is they will have much leisure time with their spouse.
For example
, they can plan
holiday
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holidays
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 or
vacation
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vacations
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according to
 their mind and whenever they want. On
a
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 whole, without children, individuals are free.
On the other hand
, there comes
the
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cons
of
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 not having babies. First and foremost, they cannot experience the most divine feeling in the world which is motherhood. With
a
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much commitment, we
also
 have our own legacy to be carried forward.
This
 evolving style of not planning a baby makes the individual away from the special relationship of being a mother or father.
Furthermore
, after
one
 sort of
age
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 many women have their eggs decreased and
this
 makes
less
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them less
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 likely to become pregnant.
For instance
, most women in modern countries like America and
United
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the United
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 Kingdom are forwarding into work and neglecting the most important
thin
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thing
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 of becoming a mother.
To conclude
, the couple needs to focus on both and be well prepared for managing the work and life balance. The demerits outweigh the merits because it's totally not a good idea to decide about delaying the pregnancy.
One
 loses the pretty moments and
also
 not planned well may face deliberate outcomes in the coming future.
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