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Some people say that children should go to school as young as possible, while others believe that children should not start primary school until they are six or seven-years-old. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Many folk today believe that offspring should not go to faculty before they are
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years
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kids
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 as soon as possible. From my perspective, I strongly agree with
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benefits offspring should not go to
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 as soon as possible , the greatest merit that needs to be remembered is that the offspring will learn a lot of things if they go to
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 as soon as possible helps people with its....noun Based on the aforementioned statements, it is broadly maintained that offspring should not go to
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, there are voices that oppose strongly the idea, stating that the beneficial offspring should not go to
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 as soon as possible brings is only one side of the issue, and if we investigate more,
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 often causes problems that should not be overlooked. One of them is that it often makes people find themselves in a situation where they will not improve their skills as much as they can. In the worst-case scenario, youngsters on
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seven
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years
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 as soon as possible certainly is problematic and people should reconsider its value and role in their life. In conclusion, it is my view that
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 as early as possible or letting them enjoy childhood and carelessness until they reach the age of tween as flawless there are definite problems that are not easily resolved.
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