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Developed countries have created many environmental problems in the World, particularly in their contribution to global warming. Why is global warming a problem? What can be done to reduce the dangers of global warming?

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In the modern
era
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 people face
lot
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 of issues related to
environment
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the environment
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. Developed countries have created many environmental
problems
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 in the world, particularly in their contribution to global warming.
This
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 essay analyses the
problems
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 and solutions
of
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 global warming. My point of view
is explain
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 in the following paragraph.
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 with,the
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problems
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problem
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 of global warming is that
firstly
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, nowadays the
temperature
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 is increasing day-by-day it leads to melt the ice cap and increase the
water
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 level in
sea
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.
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, the NASSA is predicted that the level of
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 in
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sea
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the sea
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 increase by 23
centimeters
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it
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take
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many
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 free
land
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 near
to
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the
sea
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.
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, a few animals lose their habitats
such
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 as polar
bear
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bears
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 because of melting ice.
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, the rising
temperature
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 affect not only the animals but
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,
effect
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 the human. To be clearer, the increasing
temperature
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reduce
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 the amount of fresh
water
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 in the world
it
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results
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to
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 war between people for drinking
water
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.
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, folks can not live in the society because of high humidity. There are some
solution
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solutions
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 to prevent
the
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global warming first and foremost one is that, carbon emission is the main reason for increasing
temperature
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 if the authorities promote
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eco friendly
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 vehicles
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 as electric
car
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cars
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 and
bicycle
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bicycles
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 it help to control
amount
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the amount
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 of carbon in
atmosphere
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the atmosphere
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 and reduce
temperature
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.
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, the government
introduce
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 strict rules and regulations to control the amount of carbon.
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, give awareness
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classes
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 to the people about
consequences
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the consequences
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 of global warming and promote afforestation.
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, global warming leads to
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many
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problems
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 in the world
such
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 as increasing
sea
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level
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levels
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 and reducing fresh
water
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, which can be tackled by
give
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 awareness
class
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classes
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 to
the
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folks and
implement
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implementing
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 strict rules and regulations.
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