It is thought that a certain
time
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been wasted in huge markets by the young
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it gives
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impact on their lives. I mostly agree with
this
suggestion because young
people
cannot use their
time
as prolific and they spend their allowances in these places unnecessarily.
Firstly
, the young lose their precious span in the
malls
and they cannot
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their
time
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useful things. They usually look for shopping in order to follow new trends even
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cannot afford to buy products. Especially girls adore
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shops and they do not be aware of
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they visit one
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another
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.
This
situation can be understandable in terms of their age, unfortunately they may excessive their actions.
Thus
, they lose their
time
rather
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a prolific motion
such
as sports, studying, reading and arts. In short, most young
people
ruin their youth era in favour of shopping and styling.
Secondly
, young
people
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their
money
in shopping
malls
needlessly and it harms their pocket and their
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.
People
who
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than age of 25 usually cannot earn their own
money
in most of the world and they get allowances from their parents to care
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. By the
time
these
malls
have been common, young
people
have preferred to spend their
money
due to
malls
’ attractive assets. They can shop, eat, drink, play games and watch cinema in these places. These enjoyments have become their habits and they cost.
Therefore
,
people
who consist of mostly parents have been complaining
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habits and trying to give up them because it harms their financial status excessively.
As a result
, many young
people
lose their funds
as well as
their youth.
In conclusion,
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and examples of
this
suggestion can be extended and multiplied with additional ideas.
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these
malls
provide many options to entertain
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young
people
,
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is no doubt that many youngsters
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their considerable
time
and spend their
money
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