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Nowadays, many people change jobs quite regularly, rather than working in one company for their entire careers. Why do you think this is happening? How can companies keep their workers?

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People
 are less committed
as
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than
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 they once were to the
companies
 that employ them. In comparison to the older generations, the phenomenon of switching jobs regularly has slowly become a norm, as compared to working in one company until retirement. In
this
 essay, I will discuss the reasons for
this
occurence
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occurrence
 and explain how
companies
 can increase employee retention. The main reason
this
 is happening is
due to
 workers nowadays are relatively
financial
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financially
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 stable compared to previous generations so they can change jobs without having dire consequences on their finances. As the world economy is constantly on the rise,
people
 are more well-off and have better living standards, income is no longer the primary reason
people
 look for a job. There are a few other considerations that
comes
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 into mind when selecting a job,
for example
, having a healthy work-life balance and working in a supportive and enjoyable environment. These are the main reason I believe why
people
 are switching jobs on a regular basis.
However
, I believe
companies
 can increase employee retention by instilling purpose and meaning in their work.
Companies
 should find ways to make the job interesting and appealing at the firm.
Therefore
, workers can feel immensely gratified when they have managed to complete their responsibilities after a long day at work.
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, with vague goals and tedious tasks set by the employer, employees may feel demotivated and lost, resulting in them leaving the company.
Hence
, by instilling purpose and meaning,
employee
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 retention rate would see a surge eventually.
As
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a
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apply
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conclusion, since, income is no longer the main factor for working,
companies
 should try to think creatively
on
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about
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 ways to instil
objective
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objectives
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 and direction in the workplace in order to reduce employees from leaving.
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