Some people believe that entertainers are more important than scientist in today’s world. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays,entertainers and
scientist
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a curcial
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curcial
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crucial
part of everyone's
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.many individuals reckon that entertainers rather than scientists in
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the moderne
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moderne
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world. I partially agree with the statement I would discuss in the following paragraphs.
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with ,in
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era
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Entertainers are part of every individual's growth.Because in present days folk can follow a hectic schedule
as well as
they are facing more stress and tensions .So, The population
watching
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entertainment programs like comedy movies ,web series,songs and many more.
These kind
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of activities helps to alleviate
person's
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a person's
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depression and worries.
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, IT sector workers are facing a plethora of work pressure and tensions so,
that
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time
the public watches entertainment programs like listening
comedy
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to comedy
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talk , and music.
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,
that
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time
the
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people
forget their tensions.
Furthermore
,the analyst more an essential part of
people
's
life
,the expert are
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aid to the
persons
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quality of
life
.
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in COVID pandemic
time
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most
of
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the
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humans using the invention of mobile
phone
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phones
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because that
time
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all shops and school, colleges are closed so, the only solution for
smartphone
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a smartphone
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like smartphone helps to students
life
online
class
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classes
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started through mobile phone ,
then
the
people
purchasing grocery items via smartphone and paying bills through
mobile
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their mobile
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easily .The
scientists
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are reduce
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peoples
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the peoples
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work load
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workload
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and give
easy
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an easy
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lifestyle
besides
saving their
time
.if
people
can use new technology they can get
better
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a better
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life
.
To sum up
, physicists and artists are equally important to everyone's heart .The two factors help today peoples
healthy
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and quality of
activity
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the activity
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.
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