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Some people believe that schools should teach foreign language for primary school children. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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In the fast-paced world, speaking more than 1
language
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 is a great skill. The current globalized world
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 creates more opportunities for interacting the people outside of the living country. I personally believe that in other countries
language
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 learning in primary school are advantages outweigh the disadvantages. On the one hand,
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 implementation has already begun in some schools, they added other country
languages
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 in their circular.
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 act makes progress for the primary kids to develop the ability to understand and speak bilingual
languages
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.
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, if the kid learned multiple
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, parents can make future plans
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. At a young ,age they can focus on multiple skills, like, swimming, driving, music etc. After their high school ,education they can easily get admission into foreign country universities. Flip on the other side, at that small age, no need to make any pressure on learning skills. They will get confused to learn something new. But, every citizen must learn in their native
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 is necessary.
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, If a person can able to speak different
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 and cannot communicate with the native
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, where he is grown up, that could be a barrier to his life. And those types of people cannot make good relations with the local people. So, every child at their primary school
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 must learn their mother tongue first. If they got good at that, they can start learning other
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. In conclusion, every student in their primary education must start with their local
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 only. No need to make them sick at that age.
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