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People should be at-least 21 years old before they are allowed to drive a car. To what extent you agree or disagree with the statement.

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The lower limit for driving has always been a controversial topic of discussion, whether it should be 21 years or lower than that. When somebody says “A person has to be 21 years old to drive”, I partly agree and disagree with the statement. Let me explain why. The reason why I agree the minimum age should be 21 is
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 tend to overspeed with no sense of traffic responsibility. When given a new vehicle and nobody to monitor, the youth tend to start speeding showcasing all their skills with it. I have recently seen one
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 incident where my cousin started using a car ,
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 he took it slow, but later he started to over-speed despite all the cautioning, which
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 resulted in a huge collision. The safety factor was definitely not considered and the road responsibility was lacking. There should be different programs held wherein
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 below the age are taught how to ensure safe travel for them
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 partly disagree with the above statement, as there are
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 who consider every minute detail before they set out on their journey to their destination. Let me remind you of the clipping posted on The Times wherein a teenager was driving a car well within the safety limits, following all the correct traffic rules. Most of them were surprised when they got to know the child’s age, which they commented was the most mature driving they had seen. Since most ,kids these days tend to not follow any of them. I hereby conclude that
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 below 21 years can be permitted to drive after taking the lessons on general safety measures
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