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These days a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples form your own knowledge or experience.

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 50 years have seen a dramatic increase in the popularity of complementary
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 for treating the symptoms of various diseases globally.
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alternative
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medicines
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 have had a significant role in treating the symptoms of various ailments, from my perspective, consuming them by patients arbitrarily without any medicine prescription seems illogical. The reasons for
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 are as follows. First of all, it is an indisputable fact that trying herbal remedies, the most common form of
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medicines
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, entails a comprehensive investigation of their impact on the human body,
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 it would result in irreparable expenses. Ginger could be accounted as a salient example of
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, famous for reducing blood cholesterol by up to 50 per cent.
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, if consumed by warm-tempered individuals, it would lead to high blood pressure or even worse heart attack. It is,
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, necessary for patients to check the consequences of the taken method of treatment. More important, though, is the fact that turning to those
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medicines
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 would lead to losing the golden time, which, is crucial for treating some ailments by chemical
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 and ultimately the death of the patients.
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 method of treating is more affordable than chemical
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 and heals the problems at its root, it would be ineffective in emergency situations as
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 process demands a long time. So, consulting with specialists about pursuing the most effective way of treating is more advisable. By the way of conclusion, I once again reaffirm my position that adherence to merely
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medicines
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 would result in the deterioration of the symptoms of the disease.
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 recent research, a combination of both methods would lead to more beneficial consequences.

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Task Achievement
Ensure that your essay fully addresses all parts of the task to increase the task achievement score. Although you've made a solid argument, further elaboration on why some might view the trend positively could offer a more balanced perspective.
Coherence & Cohesion
To improve clarity and comprehension, consider using a wider range of linking phrases and topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph. This will strengthen coherence and cohesion, making your arguments more accessible to the reader.
Task Achievement
Adding more specific examples or citing studies can enhance the relevance and impact of your examples, thereby improving the task achievement score. Try to incorporate examples that directly support your main points for a more persuasive argument.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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