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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where
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The graphic illustrates some information on
millions
 of tourists visiting a specific Caribbean
Island
 from 2010 to 2017.
Overall
, it is obvious that during the period there was the highest level in the total quantity of
travelers
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travellers
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 to the
Island
 and two lines (
visitors
 staying on
cruise
ships
 and
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the
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islands
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island
) have upwards and downwards over the period. The total proportion of
visitors
 to the Caribbean
Island
 experienced an increase (nearly 2.7
millions
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million
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) between 2010 and 2015.
However
, the number of
visitors
of
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apply
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standing on
island
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the island
an island
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 reached
to
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apply
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1.5
millions
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million
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 from 2011 to 2013. The line, which describes the statistic of the
visitors
 staying on
cruise
ships
 experienced a growth (0.5
millions
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million
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)
as
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apply
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equal
as
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to
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 on total measure of tourists between 2010 and 2011. A sizeable jump occurred
on
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in
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 the race which shows the proportion of
visitors
 (2
millions
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million
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) who
staying
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stayed
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 on
cruise
ships
 from 2012 to 2017. Until 2011, the proportion which shows tourist of staying on
ships
 undergone to remain the same. It stays
also
 stable, 1.5
millions
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million
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of
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apply
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visitors
is
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are
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 staying on the Caribbean
Island
 between 2013 and 2015.
As well as
,
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the total number of
visitors
 is nearly 2.7
millions
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million
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 from 2015 to 2016.
As a result
, there are a slight fall between 2011 and 2012
visitors
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for visitors
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 staying on
cruise
ships
 and from 2015 to 2016 it expected a marginal decrease for
vistors
Correct your spelling
visitors
 staying on
Island
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words millions, island, visitors, cruise, ships with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuating trend
  • initially
  • significant increase
  • slight decline
  • momentary setback
  • steady increase
  • minor fluctuations
  • reaching a peak
  • moderate growth
  • notable growth
  • surge in popularity
  • seasonal or yearly factors
  • stagnation
  • growing appeal
  • visitors worldwide
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