Would you prefer to live in a traditional house or in a modern apartment building? Use specific reasons and details to support your choice.

#house #apartment #support #choice

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?

Shelter

Add an article

The shelter

show examples

is an inevitable factor in our life. In

the

Correct article usage

apply

show examples

modern society, people can find various

kind

Fix the agreement mistake

kinds

show examples

of accommodation to live

, among

Change preposition

in, among

show examples

which traditional

Use synonyms

house

Fix the agreement mistake

houses

show examples

or modern

Use synonyms

apartment

Fix the agreement mistake

apartments

show examples

. I believe that

traditional

Correct article usage

a traditional

show examples

home

Use synonyms

is more convenient to live

Change preposition

in.

show examples

My point of view is explained in the following paragraph.

To begin

Linking Words

with, the advantage of

old

Add an article

the old

an old

show examples

Use synonyms

house

Fix the agreement mistake

houses

show examples

to live

Change preposition

in is

show examples

that

firstly

Linking Words

the

Correct article usage

apply

show examples

older houses are constricted

manily

Correct your spelling

mainly

based on the

air flow

Correct your spelling

airflow

show examples

. It helps to reduce the humidity inside in

Use synonyms

house

Add an article

the house

show examples

For example

Linking Words

, in

Correct article usage

a naalukettu

show examples

naalukettu

Change the capitalization

Naalukettu

show examples

house

Use synonyms

, there is

Change the article

show examples

open space in the middle of the

home

Use synonyms

to maintain the

air flow

Correct your spelling

airflow

show examples

Moreover

Linking Words

, the old building is part of our culture. If people live in

this

Linking Words

building helps

Change preposition

apply

show examples

the next generation can see the

home

Use synonyms

Change preposition

with

show examples

naked

Correct article usage

the naked

show examples

eyes

Fix the agreement mistake

eye

show examples

Furthermore

Linking Words

, individuals can modify the old building but, the

apartment

Use synonyms

can not.

For instance

Linking Words

, my friend's father had suggested that they can move to a modern

apartment

Use synonyms

by selling their present

home

Use synonyms

, but, my friend suggested modifying the

home

Use synonyms

with all modern amenities so that they can enjoy the comfort without giving away their

house

Use synonyms

. Yet another advantage of

traditional

Add an article

a traditional

show examples

Use synonyms

house

Replace the word

housing

show examples

is that, the maintains cost. To be clearer, compare to the modern

apartment

Use synonyms

the

maintains

Replace the word

maintenance

show examples

cost is very less

for

Change preposition

than

show examples

the old building.

For example

Linking Words

, most of the items are built using

woods

Fix the agreement mistake

wood

show examples

Correct pronoun usage

which

show examples

provide

long lasting

Add a hyphen

long-lasting

show examples

performance. So the flats have high

maintains

Replace the word

maintenance

show examples

cost

Fix the agreement mistake

costs

show examples

and the level of humidity is high so

every one

Replace the word

everyone

show examples

can not satisfy to live in

Use synonyms

apartment

Add an article

an apartment

the apartment

show examples

To sum up

Linking Words

Change the capitalization

show examples

think it is better to live in the traditional

house

Use synonyms

became

Change the form of the verb

become

show examples

a healthier person.

Submitted by amilingeorge12345 on Tue May 02 2023

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

Paragraph 1 - Introduction

Sentence 1 - Background statement
Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

Sentence 1 - Summary
Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

8
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
3
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
36
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

0123456789.0505

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.5

Complete response

6.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

271 words

🚀 Prepare for IELTS writing section today!

Unlimited Task 1 & Task 2 checks
Practice with essays, charts, and letters.
Personalized suggestions & mistake analysis
Spot every mistake and boost your score.
Topic ideas & vocabulary helpers
Expand your ideas and use the right words.
Progress tracking
Watch your writing improve with every practice.

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

8
band
As mass communication and transport continue to grow, societies are becoming more and more alike leading to a phenomenon known as globalization. Some people fear that globalization will inevitably lead to the total loss of cultural identity. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.
Many individuals express profound concerns about the spread of globalization, fearing that the unique traditions and practices of various communities may be overshadowed by a dominant global culture. Nevertheless, in my opinion, the interconnected world we live in today has the remarkable potential to actually safeguard and even enhance cultural uniqueness, especially through the innovative use of technology. This allows diverse cultures to be shared, celebrated, and preserved in ways that were previously unimaginable. As a result, I strongly disagree with the assertion that this global phenomenon inherently threatens cultural heritage.
8
band
Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
It is considered by certain people that competitions should be promoted as it can be a way to increase children's ability, while there are others who think that it is better to avoid competing but working together. In my opinion, competition and cooperation are just like two sides of a penny which both bring benefits to students.
7.5
band
In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?
With the development of the economy, many merchants choose to use novel advertising to attract consumers. There are some advantages and disadvantages of this phenomenon.
5
band
Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problemes.
These days, more and more immigrating to new countries to get a better life.It has been suggested that speech barriers can element significant issue in social interactions as well as issues in everyday life.I partially agree with this concept and in this essay, I will give some arguments to support my opinion.
5
band
Some people prefer to go to health clubs and gyms for health care, some say the walking and climbing stairs are more effective. Discuss both vies and give your opinion.
A number of people choose joining the gym membership or health communities in order to mantain their healthy life, while the remain of them think that walking and climbing stair are more beneficial. In my opinion, going the gyms or sport clubs will be useful if they do this consistantly. However, doing some regular movements such as walking and climbing will be more efficient.

Would you prefer to live in a traditional house or in a modern apartment building? Use specific reasons and details to support your choice.

Fully explain your ideas

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problemes.

Some people prefer to go to health clubs and gyms for health care, some say the walking and climbing stairs are more effective. Discuss both vies and give your opinion.