Would you prefer to live in a traditional house or in a modern apartment building? Use specific reasons and details to support your choice.

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Shelter

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is an inevitable factor in our life. In

the

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modern society, people can find various

kind

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kinds

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of accommodation to live

, among

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in, among

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which traditional

house

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houses

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or modern

apartment

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apartments

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. I believe that

traditional

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a traditional

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home

is more convenient to live

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in.

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My point of view is explained in the following paragraph.

To begin

with, the advantage of

old

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the old

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house

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houses

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to live

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that

firstly

the

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older houses are constricted

manily

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mainly

based on the

air flow

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airflow

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. It helps to reduce the humidity inside in

house

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the house

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, in

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a naalukettu

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naalukettu

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house

, there is

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open space in the middle of the

home

to maintain the

air flow

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airflow

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Moreover

, the old building is part of our culture. If people live in

this

building helps

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the next generation can see the

home

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naked

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eyes

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Furthermore

, individuals can modify the old building but, the

apartment

can not.

For instance

, my friend's father had suggested that they can move to a modern

apartment

by selling their present

home

, but, my friend suggested modifying the

home

with all modern amenities so that they can enjoy the comfort without giving away their

house

. Yet another advantage of

traditional

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a traditional

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house

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housing

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is that, the maintains cost. To be clearer, compare to the modern

apartment

the

maintains

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cost is very less

for

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than

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the old building.

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, most of the items are built using

woods

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wood

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which

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provide

long lasting

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performance. So the flats have high

maintains

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maintenance

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cost

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costs

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and the level of humidity is high so

every one

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everyone

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can not satisfy to live in

apartment

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an apartment

the apartment

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To sum up

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think it is better to live in the traditional

house

became

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a healthier person.

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Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

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Complete response

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Would you prefer to live in a traditional house or in a modern apartment building? Use specific reasons and details to support your choice.

Fully explain your ideas

Some people think that a persons improve their intellectual skills more when doing a group activity. To what extend do you agree.

n many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

People are spending a lot of money in art and sports events. Is this a good or bad thing? Give your opinion.

: It is often said that governments spend too much money on projects to protect wildlife, while there are other problems that are more important. Do you agree or disagree?