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The chart below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates the statistics on giving money to
charity
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 to British
people
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 by age range in a 20-year period since 1990. The
percentage
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 of young
people
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 from 18-25
years
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 old,
as well as
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people
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 from 26-35 and 36-50
years
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 old started to spend less cash on
charity
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 in 2010 than they did in 1990.
Although
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 the trend among these 3 groups is similar, the first group’s contribution to
charity
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 decreased drastically,
while
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 the other 2 groups decreased slightly.
For example
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, the
percentage
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 of 18-25
years
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 old
people
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, who are involved in
charity
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 plummeted from approximately 17% to 7.5%. Meanwhile seniors from 51 to 65 and over 65
years
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 old started to give money to
charity
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 in a greater extent in 2010 than it was in 1990.
For instance
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, the
percentage
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 of former group involvement rose from 35% to almost 40%,
while
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 the latter increased from 32% to 35%.
However
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, the
overall
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percentage
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 of British
people
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, who give money to
charity
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 decreased from 1990 to 2010.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words charity, people, percentage, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • charitable donations
  • age range/bracket/group
  • percentage (%)
  • 20-year period
  • British people
  • trends
  • increase/decrease
  • significant change
  • donation patterns
  • remained stable
  • highest/lowest
  • observe
  • compare
  • summarize
  • comment on
  • relevant features
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