‏Every year thousands of students go overseas to study. Although many benefit from the experience, others go home disappointed. What are the benefits and drawbacks of studying in another country?

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abroad is always considered

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a dream

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everyone. It is often argued that

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overseas

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more cons compared to the pros.

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, as to whether it is a blessing or curse, there arises a heated debate among people. As far as I’m concerned, I truly feel that

study

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abroad indeed

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graduates to receive a higher job opportunity but

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drawbacks shouldn’t be denied.

Firstly

students

manage to improve their knowledge by exposing to different types of cultures in that country. Not only

this

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but

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student gains a crucial opportunity to learn a new type of foreign language. Learning a new language is not always a bad idea as it might be useful in the future workplace. Moving forward, it is understandable that most of the prestigious universities are

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overseas. So, the

students

will receive a higher qualification

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and eventually open a new door to secure

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job

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with a higher wage and welfare in the future.

Although

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abroad contains multifold advantages,

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it’s

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drawbacks shouldn’t be denied. A common criticism is that

students

might have the

chances

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to develop homesickness because of missing

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their family members.

Besides

that, it has

also

been proven that the cost of living in a different country is way higher compared to our own country and

this

will create a burden towards the families and the

students

For example

, international

students

would apply to work as a part-timer in order to mitigate the cost of living and sometimes it will lead to an in-cooperate with their own

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Lastly

, some international

students

have even reported that they did face difficulty when communicating with the local people

due to

the discrepancy between

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culture and language background. In conclusion, despite the drawbacks of studying abroad,

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I personally believe that

study

in overseas will improve the student’s qualification profile unfortunately

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one of the main concerns

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every family.

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‏Every year thousands of students go overseas to study. Although many benefit from the experience, others go home disappointed. What are the benefits and drawbacks of studying in another country?

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Some people think that men are naturally more competitive than women. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is common aspiration among many young peopleto run their own business, rather than work for an employer. Do you think the advantages of working for yourself outweigh the drawbacks?

Some students prefer to take a gap year between high school and university, to work or travel. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Some people say that supermarkets and manufacturers have a responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging on products they sell. Others believe that it is the consumer’s responsibility to avoid buying products which have a lot of packaging. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

The increase in the production of consumer goods results in damage to the natural environment. What are the causes of this? What can be done to solve this problem?