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The chart below shows how frequently people in the usa ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main Features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows how frequently people in the usa ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main Features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart
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 illustrates data about how many people ate junk
food
 in the USA repeatedly, over a decade between 2000 and 2013.
Overall
, what stands out from the chart is that folks were reluctant to consume convenience
food
 each day or never tasted it at all
while
 the percentages of having
this
 kind of unhealthy meal once a
week
 or twice monthly were higher than four other categories. Looking at the details, as regards the type of many times a
week
 in 2003 around 17% had fast
food
then
 the figure increased to 20% in 2006 but it experienced a decrease to 16 six years later.
Following
this
, nearly 13 per
cent
 of hungry people came to
dining
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 room in the first year
whereas
this
 amount went up to fifteen per
cent
that
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was
same
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 exactly in 2006 and 2013. Another striking point is that the two highest
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 had almost
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similiar
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similar
proportion
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; in 2003 the first group who took fatty
meal
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meals
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 weekly started at 31% and it declined to 30 in
monthly
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the monthly
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 classification. In 2006 around
one_third
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one-third
 of
population
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the population
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 prefered one fatty dish during a
week
 but interestingly
this
 rate fell to 25% in
monthly
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the monthly
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 category. In 2013 around 27% had unhealthy
dish
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 once a
week
whereas
 it grew to
one_third
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one-third
 in
monthly
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the monthly
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 band. Pointedly, the lowest ratio
were
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 among (
Everyday
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) and (never) sets; 5 per
cent
 refuses to eat junk
food
 in 2003 and 4 per
cent
 for both two other years and
also
 around 3% for each day consumer
as well as
 2% in both remained years.
Submitted by mehrdad.salahi2003 on

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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fast food consumption
  • dining frequency
  • decade overview
  • trend analysis
  • to dine out
  • fluctuation
  • sharp increase
  • gradual decline
  • eating habits
  • statistical comparison
  • consuming pattern
  • noteworthy change
  • anomaly
  • periodic comparison
  • data interpretation
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