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Write about the following topic: Some people feel that cities should allow for spaces for graffiti while others feel it should be banned. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

#topic #people #cities #spaces #graffiti
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this
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 I'm going to talk about if
graffiti
 should be allowed or denied in certain spaces. To some
people
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this
 type of painting is a way to express themselves in the form of art,
on the other
hand
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 a large group of people find it offensive and disrespectful. In my
opinion
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this
 way of expressing themselves is good but
on the other
hand
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 it should have specific places for it. First of all, I believe that
graffiti
 is good if you do it in certain spaces and meanings. I'm in
favor
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 because it's the way that some individuals say what they want and I think that it's similar to abstract painting,
furthermore
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graffiti
 could be used as a form of bringing
color
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 to the city yet up to a certain point.
For instance
, Baltimore is known for scribbling.
Secondly
, I'm against
this
 decoration because sometimes it can be interpreted as an
offense
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 to civilization,
also
 your transpassing and ruining someone's property and can end up in a really bad situation.
As a
result
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this
 type of skill is vandalism that causes public safety issues and
also
 makes the zone look unsafe.
For
instance
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 the aerosols used for
graffiti
 have vaporous organic compounds,
To sum up
, I think that there should be certain spaces for
this
 skill so that vandalism can decrease and civilization can live happier
also
 so that they don't feel that insecure. That craft can vary in different areas, countries and the zone they live in.
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